Talk:Kir'Shara

GA Review

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Reviewer: Seabuckthorn (talk · contribs) 09:44, 18 January 2014 (UTC)
Nominator: Miyagawa (talk)

Hi! I'll be reviewing this article for GA status, and should have my full review up shortly. --Seabuckthorn ♥ 09:44, 18 January 2014 (UTC)

Thanks! Miyagawa (talk) 11:13, 18 January 2014 (UTC)

1: Well-written

• a. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
• b. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

WP:LEAD:

Check for WP:LEAD: Check for Correct Structure of Lead Section:  Done Check for Citations (WP:LEADCITE):  Done Check for Introductory text:  Done Check for Provide an accessible overview (MOS:INTRO):  Done Major Point 1: Plot "In this episode, Enterprise is caught in a crossfire … to the rest of the Vulcan High Council." (summarised well in the lead) Major Point 2: Production "It was writer Michael Sussman's third episode … returned as Shran." & "The episode was shot across seven days … episode "Amok Time"." (summarised well in the lead) Major Point 3: Themes ""Kir'Shara" and the Vulcan arc showed themes … compared to the Nag Hammadi library." (summarised well in the lead) Major Point 4: Reception and home media release "originally aired on December 3, 2004." & "The episode received a Nielsen rating … mixed opinions regarding the ending of the episode." (summarised well in the lead) Check for Relative emphasis:  Done Major Point 1: Plot "In this episode, Enterprise is caught in a crossfire … to the rest of the Vulcan High Council." (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body) Major Point 2: Production "It was writer Michael Sussman's third episode … returned as Shran." & "The episode was shot across seven days … episode "Amok Time"." (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body) Major Point 3: Themes ""Kir'Shara" and the Vulcan arc showed themes … compared to the Nag Hammadi library." (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body) Major Point 4: Reception and home media release "originally aired on December 3, 2004." & "The episode received a Nielsen rating … mixed opinions regarding the ending of the episode." (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body) Check for Opening paragraph (MOS:BEGIN):  Done Check for First sentence (WP:LEADSENTENCE):  Done "Kir'Shara" is the tenth episode of the fourth season of the American science fiction television series Star Trek: Enterprise, and originally aired on December 3, 2004. Definition and notability should be in the first sentence (WP:BETTER). As per WP:LEADSENTENCE, The article should begin with a short declarative sentence, answering two questions for the nonspecialist reader: "What (or who) is the subject?" and "Why is this subject notable?". The part "and originally aired on December 3, 2004" can be moved somewhere down the lead. Check for Format of the first sentence (MOS:BOLDTITLE):  Done Check for Proper names and titles:  Done Check for Abbreviations and synonyms (MOS:BOLDSYN): None Check for Foreign language (MOS:FORLANG): None Check for Pronunciation: None Check for Contextual links (MOS:CONTEXTLINK):  Done Check for Biographies: NA Check for Organisms: NA Check for Biographies of living persons: NA Check for Alternative names (MOS:LEADALT):  Done Check for Non-English titles: Check for Usage in first sentence: Check for Separate section usage: Check for Length (WP:LEADLENGTH):  Done Check for Clutter (WP:LEADCLUTTER): None

WP:LAYOUT:

Done Check for WP:LAYOUT:  Done Check for Body sections: WP:BODY, MOS:BODY.  Done Check for Headings and sections:  Done Use a different heading for section Reception and home media release. There is only a short paragraph dealing with home media release – "The first home media release … is due on April 1, 2014.". I recommend Reception. Check for Section templates and summary style:  Done Check for Paragraphs (MOS:PARAGRAPHS):  Done Paragraphs should be short enough to be readable, but long enough to develop an idea. (WP:BETTER) Fix "The first home media release … is due on April 1, 2014." in the Reception section. Check for Standard appendices and footers (MOS:APPENDIX):  Done Check for Order of sections (WP:ORDER):  Done Check for Works or publications:  Done Check for See also section (MOS:SEEALSO): None Check for Notes and references (WP:FNNR):  Done Check for Further reading (WP:FURTHER): None Check for External links (WP:LAYOUTEL):  Done Check for Links to sister projects: None Check for Navigation templates:  Done Check for Formatting:  Done Check for Images (WP:LAYIM):  Done Check for Links:  Done Check for Horizontal rule (WP:LINE):  Done

WP:WTW:

Done Check for WP:WTW:  Done Check for Words that may introduce bias:  Done Check for Puffery (WP:PEA):  Done Check for Contentious labels (WP:LABEL):  Done Check for Unsupported attributions (WP:WEASEL):  Done Check for Expressions of doubt (WP:ALLEGED):  Done Check for Editorializing (MOS:OPED):  Done Check for Synonyms for said (WP:SAY):  Done Check for Expressions that lack precision:  Done Check for Euphemisms (WP:EUPHEMISM):  Done Check for Clichés and idioms (WP:IDIOM):  Done Check for Relative time references (WP:REALTIME):  Done Check for Neologisms (WP:PEA): None Check for Offensive material (WP:F***):  Done Check for WP:MOSFICT:  Done Check for Real-world perspective (WP:Real world):  Done Check for Primary and secondary information (WP:PASI):  Done Check for Contextual presentation (MOS:PLOT):  Done

WP:EMBED:
None Prose is preferred over list (WP:PROSE): Check for Tables (MOS:TABLES):

2: Verifiable with no original research

• a. Has an appropriate reference section: Yes
• b. Citation to reliable sources where necessary: excellent (Thorough check on Google. Cross-checked with other FA & FL)

WP:RS:

Done Check for WP:RS:  Done Cross-checked with other FA & FL: Tasha Yar, List of Star Trek: The Next Generation cast members‎ & List of Star Trek: Deep Space Nine cast members Check for the material (WP:RSVETTING): (not contentious)  Done Is it contentious?: No Does the ref indeed support the material?: Check for the author (WP:RSVETTING):  Done Who is the author?: Kapell, Matthew (McFarland & Company) (Radio Times) (Star Trek.com) Leao, Gustavo (Trekweb) (The Gnostic Society Library) (Zap2it) Krutzler, Steve (Trekweb) Donnelly, G.J. (TV Guide) (IGN) Herc (Ain't It Cool News) Green, Michelle Erica (TrekNation) Epsicokhan, Jamahl (Jammer's Reviews) Douglass Jr., Todd (DVD Talk) Does the author have a Wikipedia article?: What are the author's academic credentials and professional experience?: What else has the author published?: Is the author, or this work, cited in other reliable sources? In academic works?: Check for the publication (WP:RSVETTING):  Done McFarland & Company Radio Times Star Trek.com Trekweb The Gnostic Society Library Zap2it TV Guide IGN Ain't It Cool News TrekNation Jammer's Reviews DVD Talk Check for Self-published sources (WP:SPS):

WP:MINREF:

Done Check for inline citations WP:MINREF:  Done Check for Direct quotations:  Done "finally grows up and becomes a Star Trek series this week".[14] (Random check on source 14, successful, " Enterprise finally grows up and becomes a Star Trek series this week. The series has slowly been creeping up on my anticipation list with every episode this season, each hour making me eager for the next. ") "far from a perfectly executed Trek story but they get enough right to make it a lot easier to overlook the few things they miss."[14] (Random check on source 14, successful, "Kir'Shara is far from a perfectly executed Trek story but they get enough right to make it a lot easier to overlook the few things they miss. There's a looseness to the series this season, almost like they know there's only a slim chance of getting renewed so they might as well do what they want instead of what they think will sell.") "this could become some of the best Star Trek ever made".[14] (Random check on source 14, successful, "It is truly ironic that this could become some of the best Star Trek ever made and that it will be seen by the smallest audience in the franchise's history.") "suddenly makes sense of years of previously incomprehensible Vulcan policy" … .[7] "absolutely gripping episode" except for the "ludicrousness of the ending".[16] "I suppose the Romulans had to show up at some point, I guess Vulcan is as good a place as any."[16] "pointless",[16] "not perfect, but good" with an "intriguing" ending.[17] Check for Likely to be challenged:  Done Check for Contentious material about living persons (WP:BLP): NA

• c. No original research:  Done

WP:NOR:
Done Check for primary sources (WP:PRIMARY):  Done Check for synthesis (WP:SYN):  Done Check for original images (WP:OI):  Done

3: Broad in its coverage

a. Major aspects:

Done Check for Article scope as defined by reliable sources: Check for The extent of the subject matter in these RS: Check for Out of scope: Check for The range of material that belongs in the article: Check for All material that is notable is covered: Check for All material that is referenced is covered: Check for All material that a reader would be likely to agree matches the specified scope is covered: Check for The most general scope that summarises essentially all knowledge: Check for Stay on topic and no wandering off-topic (WP:OFFTOPIC):

b. Focused:
Done Check for Readability issues (WP:LENGTH): Check for Article size (WP:TOO LONG!):

4: Neutral

WP:NPOV:

Done 4. Fair representation without bias:  Done Check for POV (WP:YESPOV):  Done Check for naming (WP:POVNAMING):  Done Check for structure (WP:STRUCTURE):  Done Check for Due and undue weight (WP:DUE):  Done Check for Balancing aspects (WP:BALASPS):  Done Check for Giving "equal validity" (WP:VALID):  Done Check for Balance (WP:YESPOV):  Done Check for Impartial tone (WP:IMPARTIAL):  Done Check for Describing aesthetic opinions (WP:SUBJECTIVE):  Done Check for Words to watch (WP:YESPOV):  Done Check for Attributing and specifying biased statements (WP:ATTRIBUTEPOV):  Done Check for Fringe theories and pseudoscience (WP:PSCI): None Check for Religion (WP:RNPOV): None

5: Stable: No edit wars, etc: Yes

6: Images (None)

Images:

(NA) 6: Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content: Check for copyright tags (WP:TAGS): Check for copyright status: Check for non-free content (WP:NFC): Check for valid fair use rationales (WP:FUR): 6: Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions: Check for image relevance (WP:IMAGE RELEVANCE): Check for Images for the lead (WP:LEADIMAGE): Check for suitable captions (WP:CAPTION):

As per the above checklist, the issues identified are:

• Fix first sentence of the lead.
• Fix heading for the section Reception and home media release.
• Fix short paragraphs.

This article is a very promising GA nominee. I’m glad to see your work here. I’m putting the article on hold. All the best, --Seabuckthorn ♥ 20:07, 20 January 2014 (UTC)

Thanks for the review, I've made those couple of edits as suggested. Miyagawa (talk) 21:40, 20 January 2014 (UTC)

OK, everything looks good now. Passing the article to GA status. --Seabuckthorn ♥ 03:04, 21 January 2014 (UTC)

Details please

Congratulations on this article's promotion to GA! As a WP editor who hasn't watched much Star Trek, though, may I make one suggestion? At present it's unclear what the Kir'Shara is; as far as I can tell, all that's said about it here is that "contains the original word of Surak." Are we talking about some kind of book, or recording, or inscription, or box, or what? I'd imagine that a short definition or description would be appropriate for the plot summary (and probably the lead as well), since the episode is named after this artifact.--Lemuellio (talk) 19:09, 29 January 2014 (UTC)

It is such a simple thing to explain the meaning of an episode title but it is so obvious people often forget to include it. That got me thinking too that the appearance of the object should be described, so only 7 years later your request had been addressed. Since the Plot section must be kept short I went ahead and added a footnote describing the relic as a tetrahedron or triangular pyramid.[1] A text description is necessary but it would be better if the article included both text and an image. I added a request to the page heading that an image be added to the article, and I think it would be a good idea if it was an image of the Kir'Shara, ideally a split image showing both the inactive relic and the version glowing and projecting text, would best enhance reader understanding of the episode.

If we had more information perhaps the prop could also be described in the Production section.[2](Archive) -- 109.79.169.104 (talk) 23:24, 28 June 2021 (UTC)

The image of Archer activating the Kir'Shara[3][4][5] might be a good choice to represent the episode but I'd be hesitant to use an image from near the end of the episode. -- 109.79.78.84 (talk) 19:57, 3 July 2021 (UTC)

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Iraq war and WMD

Part of the plot sounds like the allegations of wmd in Iraq (which had started a year before airing), and I'm surprised that this hasn't been taken up by any sources at that time. --Tilman (talk) 09:03, 26 November 2017 (UTC)